Wow... you do know your stuff. The language grates on me a bit, but I do appreciate that you had all the proper warnings and whatnots.
I'm not sure why the lines weren't going all the way across the page. That made it a bit harder to read, but I didn't really mind too much. I'm fast becoming skeptical of your age... If you can write this way at fourteen, I think you'll sell your first novel at sixteen, you sick freak you.
(That's my way of saying: You write exceedingly well.)
But if you're into military... write a West Point story! *notsosubtlehint* Very nice overall. Well, not nice, gory, but well-written. Can't tell I need sleep, eh?
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