hello everyone!
I had a bit of a authors crisis and have not written for over three months. this is the fist thing I have even attempted to write. it is going to be part of a much longer piece I am planning. if you so choose to review it, please be gentle. I am looking for comments on story smoothness, not grammar or punctuation. I am a dyslexic and am fully aware of my downfalls in that area.
thanks,
~Shadowlight~
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East of the moon and west of the sun, where there horizon reaches its uttermost limits, where sky and sea melt together lies the land of Drallion.
Drallion is split into nine great empires or kingdoms. On the northern seacoast there is Ithirica a mighty kingdom led by a royal house that has been in power for hundreds of years. In the north-land plains along The Road is the smaller but prosperous kingdom of Britaine.
In the east there are three mighty countries. On the coast nestled between the sea and The Road is the empire Tibiiwan. A strange country, the rule is not passed to the son but to the daughter, a beautiful empire ruled by a long line of empresses. On the island belt just of the coast is the tiny empire of Jaipine, a wealthy sea trading country. In the harsh mountains and high plains on the easternmost limits of The Road is the empire of Napurr a country of herdsmen and scattered villages ruled by the leading religion's leader in the capital of Nagniss.
In the south there are many small kingdoms but the chief of these is Kuluwaihii set closest to the eastern boarder it is the lifeline of trade between Napurr and the south.
In the west there is the kingdom of Sunuma which lies in the steamy jungle of Sunum. Mountainous pyramids of carved white limestone stand taller that the tallest trees cutting though the deep green growth, priest kings rule a superstitious people. In the low floodplains is the kingdom of Babgypt the mightiest of the western countries. Iron fists of it's royal house have ruled here for over a thousand years. The land is fertile from the great river and it is rich in trade for The Road splits the country in half. The furthermost country is the small city-kingdom Raputan. Set in the center of the harsh desert of Yarl. Built as a place of pilgrimage, the oasis in the center of it's great temple complex is thought to be holy. The city is a rich caravan stop. It connects the great mines of Geershan with the rest of the world.
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