I first posted this as a newbie (it was actually the reason I joined YWS), and only got a couple of reviews. I've touched it up, and I think it's improved a bit. Still, I'm going to use it as an entry for something around the middle of next month, and I really need some fresh eyes. Thanks!
No Man's Land
Christmas Eve, and I sat shivering in the trenches, my body covered in frozen mud. Gunshots and explosions rang out around me, and the pain as the reverberating soundwaves all but tore through my eardrums was excruciating.
Ducked down in the bottom of the trench to avoid the blast from a nearby shell, I took the opportunity to remember Christmases gone by, wonderful times spent with my family. Ellen and Michael would have no Father Christmas this year, I realised, and the thought grieved me. I had written to them, and to their mother, wishing them all a merrier Christmas than I imagined I would have; but to be home with them once more – it was my greatest wish.
Ellen would be ten in the next month. Almost too old to believe in Father Christmas, but when I looked at her I would always remember the miracle baby I had held while her supposedly barren mother slept, that broken, perfect day we spent together in the hospital. And little Michael – my son would be four by then, playing with toy soldiers - one British soldier, known to him only as “Papa”, should have defeated the entire German army in a matter of minutes.
My dear boy, I hope you will never have to experience the truth of war in that hard, cold reality. The winter was cruel; the Germans were merciless. We all suffered; clothes fresh three or four weeks ago, boots barely removed since we enlisted. The mud was frozen harder than concrete, and there was not even snow to lighten the mood.
How wonderful it was, to be able to imagine myself with my family at home then, even while I was so cold and dirty. It was so far from beautiful – so unlike my native England, my home. The frost shattered before me, and I ducked to avoid the full force of the shell's explosion.
As my shift ended that night and I retreated to the men’s quarters, my ears still ringing torturously, they caught the soft, far-off sound of the old German carol.
Holder Knabe im lockigen Haar,
Schlaf in himmlischer Ruh
The gentle lullaby was distant, but it silenced the restless men around me. As the hymn drew to a close, the British troops were suddenly singing back, and deep as my hatred for the Germans and their ideas was, I could not help but to join my comrades in singing Good King Wenceslas back.
And then I went back to bed, the true Christmas spirit warming my soul, and I tried not to think that tomorrow’s day of peace would bring death once more.
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Christmas Day, and my shift was about to start. It was nearly ten, and as I headed to the trenches one of the new lads – I believe it was young Jimmy - was coming the other way.
“Enjoy your shift, Sarge,” he said with a grin. I'd never seen the boy so excited, and as he was a raw recruit, he was the single most excitable kid in the battalion.
“Will I?” I asked wearily, and Jimmy only laughed. My thoughts, of course, were focused not on the war, but on my family. I had dreamed the night before of being warm at home, watching Ellen and Michael squeal in delight as they opened presents; rather than here, shooting at men – the ruthless Hun, but men nevertheless - with whom we sang songs of peace the night before. Of course, all this was before I knew.
As I came to the trenches, there was shouting, in French – one side with an English accent, the other German. I looked over the trench and some of the younger German soldiers had actually dared to come up and into No Man's Land.
I glanced at the Lieutenant behind me. He kept his expression stoic as he glanced over himself, deliberately not letting on that he had any opinion about it at all. The men around me were grinning, but French always was my worst subject at school, and I couldn't imagine what they were so happy about, in the trenches on Christmas Day instead of with their families.
Three or four men jumped out to join the Germans. I flinched, expecting to hear the poor lads – none of them over twenty-three years old – die. Instead I heard laughter.
Before I knew it we were all out on No Man's Land. A football had appeared, although nobody seemed to know where from. The scene was a wonder above all wonders. All around me, the British soldiers laughed and joked with German soldiers, the Hun, the hated enemy. There was no hostility today, only freedom; and while normally my soul reeked with hatred for Germany and its army, I could not help but laugh and join in, tackling the football off of a lad far younger than any of our own battalion. I glanced at him, shocked to see that he could be barely more than fifteen. He put me in mind of my youngest brother, and I tousled his hair involuntarily with what I hoped was a friendly smile. He grinned back amiably, and with one swift kick took the ball from in front of my right foot and sent it flying to another of his men, laughing.
I called with an identical laugh to the nearest Fusilier, but that happens to be Davis, and while he was one of the best soldiers there ever was, and by far the greatest friend, when it came to football his skills were limited, to say the least. I groaned, albeit cheerfully, and ran to help. The boy ran alongside me.
“Merry Christmas, Tommy,” he panted with a grin aimed in my direction.
“Gute Weinachten, Fritz.”
There was not a gun, or a shell, or a wound in sight. There was no snow, which the night before had annoyed me, but then, I'd wager there was no snow in England either. Out of the corner of my eye I spotted the Major striding towards us. He looks furious, but I didn't care, because here there was friendship. Within the hour, by the look on his face, we would be warring again, but for now, just for this last half-hour, one among thousands...
We had tasted peace.
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