Okay, this was pretty good. I think that it was a little too short and that you could've expanded on this more. While it's a good ending for your character to have lived, I think it is rather unrealistic and your story would be a whole lot cooler if you killed your character. That could just be me though, because I like killing off my characters in my stories... Anyway, listen to jasminebells about the exclamation points. Usually those should be kept for dialogue only in my opinion. Other than that, I really enjoyed the story and that it took place in the Black Plague years. Very interesting.
Cheers, Luxe
...or dear Bellatrix, who likes to play with her food before she eats it? Fear makes the wolf seem bigger. I got attacked by a swan.
this is really good work. I love reading about the plague (don't ask why) and this was really satisfying. a great storyline, some well described emotions. Apart from a few gramatical errors, it was really intresting. Your class willl love it. Keep Writing! Panda X
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