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Mon May 05, 2008 3:25 pm
Sohini says...



Hmm...a nice theme for a HP fan fic and Mr. Blunt should be happy.

Although (my opinion really) that Krum's passion should be a little more subtle.

But this is an enjoyable read.
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Thu May 08, 2008 3:40 am
Ross says...



Very good. The pacing was excellent. I loved your use of italics and normal font states. I don't really need anything to critique. The rest has covered it.

But I loved your display of Viktor Krum--if that's who the narrator is. He seems more than a side character now and you have really fleshed him out. Well done on that!

I found no typos at all!

Grade: A+
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Fri May 09, 2008 1:11 am
teardrops says...



Sohini: Thanks for leaving a comment! Yeah, I was a little worried about Krum acting a little OOC, but there's less to work with in terms of him.

deafwriter_19: Thank you for all the kind words! :)
  








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