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This is just a small story I thought of after beating the game. Don't fret, there's NO SPOILERS. I just wondered what Midna did the entire time when she's in Link's shadow when in the light world. So here's my take on it.

Disclaimer: Legend of Zelda, Link & Midna are copyrighted to Nintendo and Shigeru Miyamoto. Please don't sue me.

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This would normally be considered demeaning for her people. To be forced to hide in a humans shadow and only be of use when called. Yet, Midna couldn't find herself to mind. She'd rather hide in Link's shadow than one of a smelly fisherman or one of a shallow young woman whose only worry is what fabric her dress is or if the boy next door is interested in her.

Midna felt calm hiding in the darkness that lingered behind the hero. She'd lie on her back and take in her surroundings. This calm would last even when he was slashing at a foe or riding on his beloved mare Epona. However, she enjoyed her present state a bit more when they finally reached the desert. The sun was brutal and the temperature far too warm. The sun was directly overhead causing the shadow she hid inside to nearly be non-existent.

She slid directly beneath the human to hide from the blinding sunlight, placed her arms behind her head and looked upwards expecting to see a bright blue sky unmarred by twilight. Instead she found a completely different view, one that was far from a sky and more like one she really shouldn't be seeing. Midna smirked slightly, tilting her head to the side.

Perhaps she liked the view a little too much.

I like your disclaimer.

I've never played this game. I've played Zelda but not this one i'm afraid. You did a very good description and i saw it in my mind. nicely done.

Rock on and they wont sue you.

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To be forced to hide in a humans shadow and only be of use when called.

Watch for wordiness.

Yet, Midna couldn't find herself to mind.

Sounds strained. Simplify, simplify--"Yet, Midna didn't mind."

Midna felt calm hiding in the darkness that lingered behind the hero. She'd lie on her back and take in her surroundings. This calm would last even when he was slashing at a foe or riding on his beloved mare Epona.

Here you make an unnecessary change from past tense to imperfect.

However, she enjoyed her present state a bit more when they finally reached the desert.

I'm at a loss as to what this sentence means. Her present state? I think you're trying to say that she enjoyed the state she was in before the desert more than her state in the desert...but it all comes off as anachronistic.

luna_the_shiekah wrote:Perhaps she liked the view a little too much.

Haha, now that is some priceless humor. I love it

Great job!

That was wonderfully written. Short, sweet, and an enjoyable read. The last bit was, as naturesgirl put it: A piece of priceless humor.

I really liked it. One thing:

Yet, Midna couldn't find herself to mind.

Shouldn't that be "Yet, Midna couldn't find it in herself to mind."?

Anyways, very well written. Thank you for writing it! :3

lol I like the ending. Pervy and disgusting but still funny.