It has been a while since I've read the books, so I didn't realize that Susan didn't have the happy ending everyone else got in The Last Battle. Great job on giving her one
Lilyy03 wrote:I: 1947
Rouge and frustration color her cheeks. She lowers her chin and pulls an experimental smile. Hers is a bewitching face. I believe you intended the first word to be Rage here.
II: 1949
She twists and tilts before the full-length mirror, hunting for imperfection. shouldn't this be imperefections?
III: 1960
Familial, but not close enough to reopen wounds.
Okay here the word should be familiar.
Drifting from room to room like a restless ghost, Susan beings to think that she had left before any of them.
Begins.
V: 1989
It is a career that had begun four year earlier, as she left Roger's funeral. [/color
[color=#008000]years
Whether she had been playing mother to Edmund and Lucy, raising Lizzie, or watching over Roger in his last months, she had always needed to take [color=#008000]careof someone. [/color]
VII: Once and always.
She lifts her head. She can see for miles. Craggy mountains, glassy lakes, whimsical clouds flitting across the sky. Five-petaled scarlet flowers. Enormous bees. A figure sprinting towards them.
"Caspian?" she whispers.
In answer, Aslan swerves and pounces on the young man. The three of them tumble together over the cushiony grass. She grabs Caspian's green velvet sleeve.
"It's you," she says simply.
In answer, he leans forward on his elbows and gives her the kiss she remembers so well.
My favorite part. I love Caspian!
Between two hills ahead of them is a pergola whose stones are almost invisible under white-blossomed vines. Three figures sit on thrones under its shade; a fourth throne is empty.
I believe where you said stones you mean thrones?
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