Quick notes before i begin, paragraphing confuses me SO MUCH, and i know its supposed to be at the end of a thought, but it still confuses me. Also I'm pretty sure I used the semi-colon wrongly at the end there, that confuses me too.
The world was black. An all consuming black. I was weightless. The darkness pushed in on my soul, my lungs were struggling to find air, but none was found. After momentary terror, through some type of deity’s will, air found its way into my lungs as if sucked through a straw. My feet seemed as though they were being vacuumed downwards, toward something. There was radiance, like the flame of a candle held high in the air illuminating the edges of my vision.
Abruptly a lush green landscape surged its way through my retinas and registered with my brain. Right in front of me a stoic precipice towered above the verdant surroundings. At the very foundation of the rock jutting out of the earth a bright crimson color caught my interest.
My pulse quickened upon realizing what exactly this crimson blot upon the world was. A body, sprawled upon the gentle grass seemed so out of place.
“What abomination could have disturbed this peaceful region” I asked myself.
I crept closer, alert, anticipating the moment I would have to find out what exactly harmed this body. My heart still racing upon reaching the body, though nothing had pounced on me.
Upon closer inspection I found the body to be spread eagled on the ground slightly slumped over, as if this being had just drifted off into the world of dreams. I wanted to see the face of this person who had intruded such a serene area with a sense of unwanted violence. I reached out and gently prodded the shoulder of this, now identifiable, male. His upper body fell back, as if expecting someone to catch him, and alighted on the soil with a gentle thud. I took a step closer intent upon examining his face. I leaned slowly in, and gasped. My pupils dilated. My knees went weak. I was staring; at my own face.
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