z

Young Writers Society


Ladders



Random avatar


Gender: Female
Points: 1041
Reviews: 6
Tue Jan 17, 2012 2:12 am
TheAmazon says...



Another poem from my final project this semester, a rough draft. Criticism needed, please!

"Raise the bar."

It seems pretty high
already,

if you ask me.

Pushing,
sacrificing,
stressing.

For this seemingly
unachievable

Goal.

To be the best.

To succeed, to
conquer,
to be happy.

I don't know if I am.

Missing my friends,
losing sleep,
studying,
working,
planning,
worrying.

What happens when I get there?

Will I be

happy?
  








Painting is poetry that is seen rather than felt, and poetry is painting that is felt rather than seen.
— Leonardo da Vinci