Young Writers Society

The strange logic in your clumsiest line
stayed emblazoned on my mind
break up the family
and lets begin to live our lives
I went to see all my friends tonight
it wasnt Youth, it wasnt Life
born Old, sadly wise
resigned (well, we were)
to ending our lives

Im so glad to grow older
to move away from those awful times
I want to see all my friends tonight

Yes you found love but you werent
at peace with your life
home late, full of Hate
despise the ties that bind

oh Im so glad to grow older
to move away from those younger years
now Im in love for the first time
and I dont feel bad
Let me see all my old friends
let me put my arms around them
because I really do love them
now, does that sound mad?

Captain of games, solid framed
I stood on the touchline
hailstones, driven home
in his car-no brakes? i dont mind

Im so glad to grow older
to move away from those darker years
Im in love for the first time
and I dont feel bad
so wish me luck my friends
goodbye

It seemed sort of repetitive at times, though they weren't really repeating anything at all... There's something about this that I didn't really liked, yet I liked it at the same time... Good job, I suppose.

The poem was pretty good but I really really loved the title. I suppose you meant to do this but all the Ims without apostrophes were a little annoying. I liked the first stanza best.

Thanks then, I suppose.
The forgotten apostraphes weren't on purpose. Weird that it annoyed you.
Thanks for your input.