Young Writers Society

Years have passed,
since I've first met you.
Five years, to be exact,
Five years of you.

When I first met you,
I was only 8.
I was new,
and you made me your friend.

You hugged me tight,
When I cried.
You patted my back,
When I choked on my own laughter.

You stood up for me,
when the world turned away.
You fought for me,
when nobody else cared.

Sure, we've had our fights,
and I couldn't bear to see your face.
But then in the end, I realised,
you were always right.

And to this day,
I've kept my silent promise.
I hold your hand,
and keep your smile.

Just like how you've done.

So thank you!
I doubt this poem's enough,
to actually convey the feelings,
that I have for you.

A really good poem. Friendship is a really beautiful thing and your poem captures the theme nicely. You are right sometimes words are just not enough to describe the love we feel for our friends.

Hey! Justtrying, Moon here to review.

First things first- the poem is really great, it has a nice feeling to it.

Your starting is also good, I like the way you've started by mentioning the start of your friendship and time you've spent together. Although I can't say the same thing about your ending, it sounds a bit incomplete, maybe if you added another stanza or just another line to it maybe it would feel like it's complete or something.

Maybe it's just my opinion but then again that's what I am here to give you... Anyway all-in-all the poem was great.

Justtrying wrote,
You hugged me tight,
When I cried.
You patted my back,
When I choked on my own laughter.

I especially loved this stanza, great work and keep writing...

Very heartfelt and well-spoken. I'm sure your friend will love this poem! It is so true that words are just too limited to describe all of our complex feelings and relationships. This reminded me of my own friendships. Sorry for not really being helpful and all. Anyways, good luck and happy writing!:P

-Crescent

Friendship is something that we rely heavily in our life, and you have worked out well to give this message. It would have been super-duper great (it's still great) if there were some more emotional hooks to give us feelings like "awww". Well written, nicely done. Keep it up!

this really touched my heart
great work..!

A lovely poem, that came from a non-rhyming heart. I'm especially fond of this line:

Justtrying wrote:You patted my back,
When I choked on my own laughter.

It just added the right feel to the poem.
The title did remind me of the T.V show, however. I wonder if you could find a more original name?

Muffins! <333

Hiya! I really liked your poem and you portrayed friendship means. The rhyme seems a little bit forced but it was a pretty good job on that. It just needs some cleaning up and I think in the first stanza you rhymed you with you, and that doesn't really work.

I think your flow was okay. But I wasn't left satisfied with the ending completely. You left me feeling like there was more going to be said... but there was not.

But the meaning was very clear and strong and I loved reading this poem.

Deanie x