Young Writers Society

Last night the thunder shook me.
the hum of the vibrating windowpanes
got translated in my dreams
to a slight tugging at my jugular vein

it was raining so much, I thought of Noah's warning
and Joseph's voice faintly telling me to run away
staying awake was my only refuge from nightmares,
reminded of judgment, I questioned myself

Why does this heart beat?
when it could just stop and be cold
and die slow with me
when my feeble hand is in Yours.

Why do all the visions bring back
the memory of each sin I've done?
why does my insight reflect
nothing worldly?

My prayer won't delay the moment
but it might stir me in a direction
where you might find me in the middle
of this endless desert.

So I'm writing my deeds somewhere in the sand
trusting the winds you send, as tests
I hope they find acceptance
and leave their marks till I'm called by my name.

So tell me why I've fallen so low
to count my blessings in gold?
what should I do to revile myself? punish myself?
or is it better to sob and whimper at your gates?

No, silence doesn't speak
No, silence never speaks
It's felt on nights like these
It's felt in here, deep.

I'm in awe. This is simply... beautiful!
I love the way you format this, with incomplete sentences in each stanza. It has a very nice rhythm to it.
The words are very dark, and very meaningful. It speaks loudly. I get clear, yet vague images in my mind as I read this.
The magnificence of this poem is hard to describe. I truly loved it. I hope to read more of your work, and keep writing!!

Last night the thunder shook me.the hum of the vibrating windowpanes

Wonderful my dear! this evoked such an image in my head...mostly because I love storms.
Loved your rhythm. It was dark and profound. Loved it.

Happy writing!

This poem is really beautiful. The way it's captured, the words...amazing. Well done!
Here's my favourite part:

So I'm writing my deeds
somewhere in the sandtrusting the winds you send, as tests
I hope they find acceptance
and leave their marks till I'm called by my name.

And also:

No, silence doesn't speak
No, silence never speaks
It's felt on nights like these
It's felt in here, deep.

I really loved this last stanza, it had me in awe. Truly lovely poem.

hi LooneyPandaxx here!

i think this poem is beautiful. its so deep and toughful.i like the unfinished sentences in the sanzas, it really puts feeling into your work.
keep it up!!!

Perfect!