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Octave wrote:I feel the first para had a lot of punctuation a little over whelming. at times.
And when we meet under the frozen oak tree
I'lli'll smile and say, 'Ii wish youYou nothing
but happiness'
and you'llYou'll laugh and share a kiss
beneath a twilit sky. Hey, I never read twilit before, always read twilight. Buut then, it makes sense. And the portion's above were probably typing errors or I don't know why you use capital Y for you.
One winter, a winter so cold
even spring can't thaw it,
my paintsisn't the plural of paint, paint? I thought so, but, well. will freeze
and i won't remember how you feel;
But until then -
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