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Sat Nov 05, 2011 5:56 pm
Anwesha says...



It seems like Reasons don’t exist,
And Doubts just fade away.

It seems like Words explain nothing,
And it seems like Smiling is inevitable.

It seems like Risks reduce the pain,
It seems like Sorrow has no meaning.

It seems like Distance is a just a ‘helpful friend’,
And it seems like Time has been overpowered.

It seems like Friends are the only beings left on Earth,
It seems like Trust has no boundaries.

It seems like Laughing is the only cure to everything,
And Devils have perished and Angels rule.

It seems like Everything is possible,
It seems like Joy has no limitations.

It seems like Kisses talk,
And it seems like Music has a new tune.

It seems like Life is beautiful,
And it seems like I was blessed by an angel
To have found you…
Imperfection is beauty,
Madness is genius,
And it's better to be absolutely ridiculous
Than to be absolutely boring... :-D
  





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Sat Nov 05, 2011 6:00 pm
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DaughterofEvil says...



Hmm...it's rare to find a positive poem that isn't about love these days. Well, your message was positive enough. My only suggestion here would be to get rid of the capital letters for words such as "sorrow" and "friends". There's already enough emphasis on them without them in my opinion, and if you use the capitals it seems as if you're trying too hard. I hope this helps! :D Sorry if I seem too harsh.
  





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Sun Nov 06, 2011 5:49 pm
PurpleEurope says...



This strikes me somehow. It seems sad, but in a positive way. Like the sad of your first child getting married. But It really is positive, and that may be how it srikes me. You read in to the words that you're reading, and you get this feeling of happiness, and that all these things are true, and maybe you are reall never that sad. Is that what you were going for? Maybe not, but everyone sees poetry differently, right?
It seems like Everything is possible,
It seems like Joy has no limitations.

This reminds me of something I once read. "To a happy man with a hammer, every problem seems like a nail"
I love how the whole things just flows in sad cheerful way. Am I making any sense? I hope so. Good Job.
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