Young Writers Society

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I say goodbye to the tears staining my reflection.


I stand here,
my heart beating flutters in my ears.
I want to be able to say I don’t care
Don’t care that you’re saying these things to me,
telling me what I’ve dreaded to hear.

Don’t you understand how hard this is?
To know what I’ve thought is true,
To know that holding this glass
that is my cracked heart,
makes you want me less and less.

I gave you all I could,
held out the broken limbs
that I hoped you would heal,
and with your tender touch,
hold onto.
I didn’t think was going to happen.
Thought you said ‘Forever’.

But forever has come and gone,
and all that’s left is a soul
jagged pieces of a love
that doesn’t exist anymore.

I say goodbye,
to the tears that are on the mirror,
staining my reflection.
You are but a ghost in the past,
someone who held my deepest secrets,
Held them tightly,
and then threw them away with both hands.

Well I say never again,
never again will I trust my soul
to another who has already shared another.
It doesn’t mean I won’t love.
It means I won’t love how I loved you.

I loved you too much.
I gave you too much.

And now I take it all away.
I say goodbye,
to the tears in the mirror,
staining my reflection.

Oh my god! This was phenomenal and written so vibrantly written I thought she was telling it to me.I'm assuming that he cheated and or left her and so these are her feelings. I would [i]love[i] to see more!


KEEP WRITING AMAZING SHIZZ! ~Neonwriter <3

You know, I hate having to admit this, but this touched me. I hate the notion 'cause I've gone through something sorta similar, maybe not on such an epic scale as in this poem of yours, but still. So I can honestly say that this triggers emotions and works really well as the sort of poem you evidently wanted it to be.

Excellent job. Nothing more to add, I'm afraid.

|Life|

Fantastic job! Your poem (though I can see it as a song) is pretty well written, and I definitely did not see any typos or spelling/grammar errors. You wrote about a pretty overused topic, but you still managed to put something original into it, which I liked. Over all, great poem. I don't really have anything else to say, just that my favorite lines were the last stanza, where the title came from.
TSM