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White Granite



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Fri Dec 09, 2011 3:36 am
captaindomdude says...



Spoiler! :
This was a poem I did about a month ago for a poetry contest I was entered in by my english teacher. I haven't uploaded anything recently, but I'm a little proud of this and one other poem I've done, so I'll be uploading them.


With arms crossed in peace,
And serenity on my face,
I look upon the mall at Washington DC.
I see my brothers in stone, Lincoln, Jefferson, Adams, Roosevelt, and Washington.
Heroes who fought for what they believed in.
I stand in good company.
I see children of all colors who step off school buses,
And stand in awe at the sight before them,
Making my dream true.
They walk down the path towards my mountain of despair,
See the Cherry Blossoms bloom on either side,
Their flower’s rebirth on the anniversary of my death.
They hear the rush water of the Tidal Basin behind me,
It’s separating them from the noise of the city.
They reach the mountain of despair,
And see me, waiting for them.
A stone of hope, my visage cut from it.
A man who gave them the rights,
To give all the colors of humanity the right
To sit next to each other on the school bus.
They walk around me, see me steadfast, unmoving.
A Black man in white granite.
They wonder why I’m white here,
When in all the pictures of then I’m black.

And I wish I could tell them
How my skin now reflects what my skin then showed.
How back in 1963, I walked up the steps of that hero of mine,
Great Lincoln, and spoke of how skin doesn’t matter.
Of how we are all equal, and need not be judged by the color of our skin
But by our actions and deeds.
I wish I could tell the children before me
Of how this was the greatest tribute my spirit, my idea,
Could be given.
Not my address, 1963 Independence Ave.
Not the Cherry blossoms that bloom around me,
Not vast area I sit in.
But by making my skin white,
I’m showed that it’s not skin that matters,
Its deeds.
The world cried when my body died in 1968,
But I wish I could tell them.
How I forgive the man who shot me.
Because what stood on the steps of the Lincoln Memorial in 1963,
Was more than a man, it was a Dream, an Idea.
And Ideas are Bulletproof.
"If beauty could be done without the pain, well I'd rather never see life's beauty again"-Modest Mouse.

"What lies beneath this mask is more then a man, it's an idea. And ideas are bulletproof" V, V for Vendetta.
  





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Fri Dec 09, 2011 8:49 am
Flyingchaos says...



I'm a big fan of MLK :D
This is so touching and I feel the meaning of this :D
Beautiful.. Fantastic and touching!!! :)
  





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Fri Dec 09, 2011 5:01 pm
larnise says...



I'm rendered speechless by this wonderful writing.
Laugh at yourself first, before anyone else can.
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Fri Dec 09, 2011 8:54 pm
Deanie says...



Hi there!

I'm a big fan of Martin Luther Kind, and I am really happy because we are studying him at the moment in History. I think your poem is very interesting. You have a real good idea here and you know how to sue it. It all looks grammatically correct and the story was very intriguing. There isn't much more I can say but just repeat that I loved it!

Deanie x
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