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Sat Jan 21, 2012 5:14 pm
NoraOHara says...



What is 13?

a number
a curse
a girl

A female
a person
an aqiantance

a friend
a best friend
a love

not lonely like 1
not lucky like 7
but a little odd like 5

shes curious
but vial
shes optimistic
but tempting
shes beautiful

shes my 13
my unlikely favorite
  





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tgirly says...



You spelled aquaintance wrong, and I'm not completely sure I spelled it right, so you'll have to check that. I like the first part, but I'm not sure you pull it all together at the end. Good job though, I always liked short-lined poems and you have a nice rhythm.Hope this helps!
When I was young, I admired clever people. Now that I am old, I admire kind people.
-Abraham Joshua Heschel
  








You are going to love some of your characters because they are you, or some facet of you, and you are going to hate some characters for the same reason.
— Anne Lamott