This is pretty, with a rather odd theme. You used something to which most people could relate to convey a message that was very pretty, if a little sad. The line, "I find it somewhat strange ... How it was in the covered clock faces ... ... That I truly saw my reflection."
Some Nitpicks:
1. "With their CLOYING, ... Claustrophobic coverings" <= This didn't seem like the best word to me. It conveyed a pretty image, but it took me out of the poem some.
2. I usually don't like it when people use contractions in poetry. Personally, I think stuff like "It is just a matter ... Of brushing of the dust." more than 'It's' You have contractions scattered all over the place in this, and it took me out of the poem some.
Otherwise, I very much liked this, and would give it seven of ten stars.
Points: 313
Reviews: 18
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