The only thing i wouls say would be is instead of " I can cry into your pillow and punch it if I'm angry." I'd say I can cry into your pillow or punch it if I'm angry.
That Is All.
Great poem!
Your warmth and comfort are what get me through each day.
No matter what happens each day it is always you who is on my mind.
Even if you aren't always comfortable at first, I end up waking up in the morning wishing I wouldn't have to leave you ever.
When I'm sick or feel blue you are there, I can cry into your pillow and punch it if I'm angry.
You are one of the most important things in my life.
Never cease to exist.
(This sounds more depressing than I originally planned it to.)
The only thing i wouls say would be is instead of " I can cry into your pillow and punch it if I'm angry." I'd say I can cry into your pillow or punch it if I'm angry.
That Is All.
Great poem!
Bed's are the best thing to cuddle with. That's what is so great about being single for Valentine's day.
Cuddle with your bed, and love your food. I love how realistic this poem sounds, even though it's a little depressing.
I love my bed, more then I love my music, and I do love music.
Keep Writing, and enjoy your bed 
~Sparkles
Hi there, Gaurav here for a review! Man, that was new. I haven't read any poem about bed.
Personally I really liked your theme [I am a serious introvert who spends his whole vacation on bed, either reading or writing. So I have a serious relationship with my bed 
] You get brownie points for the theme itself.
I strongly recommend you to expand this poem and make it lyrical. This is a fresh idea and shouldn't be wasted.
Even if you aren't always comfortable at first, I end up waking up in the morning wishing I wouldn't have to leave you ever.
The sentence is too gigantic to digest. I recommend you to rewrite it and make it smooth.
When I'm sick or feel blue you are there, I can cry into your pillow and punch it if I'm angry.
I'm married to my bed. So I can relate and I shall serenade her with this poem later >_>
HI. 
My only nitpick:
Your warmth and comfort are what get me through each day.
No matter what happens through the day it is always you who is on my mind.
I love my bed to. I mostly read on it because i don't have anything better to do with my life. It does sound a little depressing but it is true. When i get mad i scream in my pillow or even punch it. So yeah I like your poem about your bed.
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