hi!
The imagery in this poem is really vivid and I can picture everything so clearly.
I like that you are playing with the idea of 'home sweet home' and it is so strong throughout.
I love the repitition of the fruit with words such as "bitter" and "rotting" and I especially like that you bring back the fruit reference at the end.
my favourite bit is the first two sections and the idea of coring a fruit/house:
"ripping open a fruit with bare fingers
and scraping out its center"
and how it repeats the idea SO nicely with:
"you’ll always start with a heart in this
hollow house, and slowly its body will be cored
out "
Overall this is a really lovely poem and makes me think of the house I live in and how many versions of myself I have become because of it.
silas
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