Young Writers Society

I think that was a cute little peek into the lives of Celina and Alejandro, I would like to read more of them. Your writing is to the point and very concentrated, I like that, no time wasted in describing their appearance as it is not needed for this story. Absolutely crisp, I love it.

Hello Hello I hope you dont mind me coming in with a review. This Is an older piece but I figured I would give it a try. Overall it is a very cute if short moment and I won't be able to go as in-depth as I normally do. I only have to things I would bring up to consider.

Firstly in the first line, I think there's a typo. "In the darkness of the forest, Celina and Alejandro riseded." I would change that to " In the darkness of the forest, Celina and Alejandro rose. " ( I am not a grammar pro raised just doesn't seem to sound right to me )

Lastly, since this piece is so short I feel describing the forest with smell and other senses might give the reader a better chance at immersion. Maybe having the characters move or go through their daily life could also add further depth to it. ( Not to be rude it's just hard to when it is short like this to make it feel vivd is all )

Sorry if I came off harsh keeping writing and drink water!

Wow, what a cool little story! I love how it dives straight into the action with Celina and Alejandro in the spooky forest. The idea of them being cursed into a vampire and a clown is so unique and fun—it really grabs your attention right from the start!

The dialogue between Celina and Alejandro feels so genuine, And that twist at the end with Celina declaring her love? pretty unexpected and totally awesome! It adds this whole new layer of excitement to the story.

Overall, I really enjoyed reading this. It's short and sweet but packs a punch with its creativity and imagination. Can't wait to read more from you! Keep up the awesome work!

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression:This is a lovely little piece here. It seems I've somehow run into a second more wholesome story here which is quite rare in such a short time period and I am delighted. This one is an especially powerful here with some very interesting background emotions here.

Anyway let's get right to it,

In the darkness of the forest, Celina and Alejandro riseded. Cursed by a cake slice that made them monsters one Halloween night, Alejandro was turned into a vampire, and Celina was turned into a clown.

“Sometimes, I wish that I could go back home, and see my family again.” Alejandro said.

Celina turned to look at him, curiosity in her purple eyes. She was more attune to the monster life than him, but sometimes, he saw a flicker of sadness in her eyes.

“But then I look at you, and suddenly, being a monster isn’t so bad. I like you, Celina. More than a friend would. Do you like me?” Alejandro asked.

Celina grinned, and then, she cackled, her voice ringing throughout the forest, pitched with insanity and joy.

“Why, I love you too!” She declared.

And then, she planted a kiss on his pale cheek.