MEOW! Hello, friend! My name is Ellie and today I will be reviewing using my very own Black Cat Review Method! It is very similar to the incredible YWS S'more Method but I have Halloween-ified it and made it spooky! My little black cat friend, Vladimir, wants to offer his opinion on your amazing literary piece:
Mystical Witch Hat - What I See, Observe, and Interpret
Your first sentence is really engaging:
Now that I can do nothing,
All I am doing is regretting my life.
This does a really great job of catching my attention and I love how full of emotion it is. I love the statement of now that I can do nothing. That is full of so much- regret, looking back at the past, sadness, isolation. You capture a lot of emotion in those two lines.
Why did I meet you?
Why did I see you?
Why did I fall in love with you?
Now that I can do nothing,
All I am doing is regretting my life.
Why did I get this life?
Why am I still alive?
The use of asking questions is amazing! I find this poem so personal and so I can tell how genuine these thoughts are. Great work!
I would rather want to die,
Then listening to another lie.
Now that I can do nothing,
All I am doing is regretting my life.
This was just a trap,
With a gift wrap.
This flows very well and I enjoyed the rhymes you used. It really helped me be a lot more engaged and felt like it flowed very well when I said it out loud.
Vladimir’s Advice - Suggestions for Improvement
I would rather want to die,
Then listening to another lie.
I think this should be:
"I would rather die,
than listen to another lie"
Jack O’Lanterns - My Favourite Parts and Praises
Overall, I loved the emotion that you conveyed in this piece. I found it very powerful and full of regret. I think you are a wonderful writer and this is a great reflective lyrical piece.
I loved this quote:
All that left is a broken heart,
On which you placed a dart.
Regretting.
Black Cat Cuddles - Concluding Ideas and Thoughts
Thanks for sharing this. Keep writing!
Your friend,
Ellie Mae
Points: 10040
Reviews: 211
Donate