Another cultured circus lover. I enjoyed reading this song, and I appreciate the dark circus vibes. I’ll be sure to check out your other songs! ^v^
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Welcome to the circus, welcome to the show
Where being normal's boring, and insane is practical
Bein' ordinary will isolate, just so you know
It's too bad, so bad, you'll always be alone
You won't touch a needle, yet you reap what you sow
~
"You know that there's no one like me"
That's the point, you were my dream
You always abused me so beautifully
You cut me off, and stole my sanity
I wished, for so long, it was meant to be
and now I'm a Circus Freak
~
We could have had it all, but the scars on my face
They refuse to heal, and they'll always leave a trace
Of what you did from me, what you stole from my embrace
Here's a ticket, you'll need it, so you can see what I made-
YOU made me a Circus Freak
Welcome to the circus, welcome to the show
Where being normal's borning, and insane is practical
Bein' ordinary will isolate, just so you know
It's too bad, so bad, you'll always be alone
You wont touch a needle, yet you reap what you sow
~
"You insane, obsessive bastard, go and die"
If I said I didn't miss you, that would be a lie
But the only ones here were you and I!
Some how, it feels so good to cry
If it makes you happy, there's good in goodbye!
And now I'm a Circus Freak
~
We could have had it all, but the scars on my face
They refuse to heal, and they'll always leave a trace
Of what you did from me, what you stole from my embrace
Here's a ticket, you'll need it, so you can see what I made-
YOU made me a Circus Freak
Welcome to the circus, welcome to the show
Where being normal's boring, and insane is practical
Bein' ordinary will isolate, just so you know
It's too bad, so bad, you'll always be alone
You wont touch a needle, yet you reap what you sow
~
~
~
You made the tools, you made the payment fee
You pieced together a monster made of memories
"Don't come back here" yet you crawl right back
"Don't come back here" I thought we left it at that
you left me so fragile
you left me so weak,
now I'm nothing left but a Circus Freak
How does it feel, knowin' you cant let go?
I've finally gotten over you, finally, you can know
here's a ticket, you'll need it, so you can see what I made-
YOU made me nothing but a Circus Freak
~
We could have had it all, but the scars on my face
They refuse to heal, and they'll always leave a trace
Of what you did from me, what you stole from my embrace
Here's a ticket, you'll need it, so you can see what I made-
YOU made me a Circus Freak
Welcome to the circus, welcome to the show
Where being normal's boring, and insane is practical
Bein' ordinary will isolate, just so you know
It's too bad, so bad, you'll always be alone
You wont touch a needle, yet you reap what you sow
And I'm now the star of my show (not you)
Circus Freak
Another cultured circus lover. I enjoyed reading this song, and I appreciate the dark circus vibes. I’ll be sure to check out your other songs! ^v^
This is an amazing poem.
I had a really bad day today because of someone and this poem is quite suitable for the situation.
"We could have had it all, but the scars on my face
They refuse to heal, and they'll always leave a trace
Of what you did from me, what you stole from my embrace
Here's a ticket, you'll need it, so you can see what I made-
YOU made me a Circus Freak
Welcome to the circus, welcome to the show
Where being normal's boring, and insane is practical
Bein' ordinary will isolate, just so you know
It's too bad, so bad, you'll always be alone
You wont touch a needle, yet you reap what you sow"
This poem is great but particularly this paragraph is marvelous.
I loved this paragraph, the author rocked, and the readers are shocked.
Awesome.
Keep it up.
Waiting for more.
Thank you.
Hello, My Friend!
I am Raven, and upon stumbling across this piece in the Green Room, I thought I'd leave a review.
Oh my gosh, I loved this! The theme is so cool; it feels like there's a lot of great, rich meaning that was woven into this piece, made easy to understand by the vibrant -yet quite eerie- circus theme. It acts as a very good analogy for this short story of troubled romance.
As for a more technical review, I have nothing much to say. I didn't spy any errors or the like, the subtle rhyme scheme worked great, and I very much enjoyed the formatting. The whole thing reads very smoothly, as the lyrics should. I could absolutely imagine a tune behind this. Great writing job ~
Picking a favorite line in this would be super hard. One thing I enjoyed a lot was the chorus you had going:
Welcome to the circus, welcome to the show
Where normal is boring, and insane is practical
Bein' ordinary will isolate, just so you know
It's too bad, so bad, you'll always be alone
You won't touch a needle, yet you reap what you sow
And I'm now the star of my show (not you)
Circus Freak
Hi!
First of all, I would like to share that the song/poem/thingy-mijingy is quite good! I love the rhythm and way that it moves.
Now for the review. I think that to keep the rhythm that you have going on, you need to read it out loud to yourself. One of the things that I noticed is that when you say this:
Where normal is boring, and insane is practical
You make me so fragile and weak
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