Hello! This is AkuRashomon and I do know it has been awhile since I have reviewed or commented on your work. But to be honest, I love this novel(?) you are writing. Although, nowadays, I have only been reading them. But if you want a review, I think your writing style has improved and rather, the plot has also gotten less confusing
For some reason, I just love Beth's quirkiness here. She's been one of my favorite characters recently, reading this and the past chapters. This work of yours has been reminding me of that one TV show that got famous named Stranger Things. I would genuinely want to see a twist in this story. I also see some improvement in the dialogue. I like the fact that you do not just use the word "said". You would add more detail to what the character's doing, the character's emotions, tone and stuff like that. I would love to see what is inspired by this fanfic if I have time.
Just keep me updated and tag me on your comments because as my bio says, school is a pain in the butt. I would be here from time to time but not much. I only post poems on my forum for Napo and for fun. I think I rarely do reviews but I would do that when I have a vacay after my finals and moving up ceremony. Anyway, thank you for sharing this piece, @vampricone6783!
- AkuRashomon
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