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Love in War

by JTTL


The sandy landscape is all I see

Night - it was supposed to be

Lighten by the explosive mines

Here, I feel i was forced to walk on a fine line

I was meant to watch the lands.

I was meant to guard my men

And yet I was watching the stars

Praying to hold your hands once more.

My stomach gravels with dirt

When it should be with the butterflies

Having to miss you so much

My mind is bleeding out with the thought of you.

.

I thought writing for you would ease my heartache.

But the more I think of you

My mind becomes a blur

I don’t know what else to tell you

Fearing this could be my last word;

To describe these feelings the alphabet cannot.

.

A man who cries at war.

While the ground roars beneath him

Enraged countries fighting under the watchful moon

As She watches a sober who sobbed for his far away love, too.

.

‘I want to come home

And see your face again.’

That was all he wrote

Until the page burns into nothing

along with him as well.

- JTTL


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Tue Apr 30, 2024 1:12 pm
Lolita18 wrote a review...



Hey, here for a review and I am so glad i clicked on it. the emotions i felt from this piece are indescribable but i will try.


I was meant to watch the lands.

I was meant to guard my men

And yet I was watching the stars

Praying to hold your hands once more.


These lines!!! they are portrayed so beautifully. the ache for the loved one is so raw. you know your responsibilities and you're performing them with everything in you but still you can't help but miss that one person, actually it could be more than one and it could be anyone, your family, friends , your spouse, your children. but you are going to stay on the front and protect them and your people.



Fearing this could be my last word;

To describe these feelings the alphabet cannot.


how heart-wrenching this is!! you have described this incredibly. the feeling needs no alphabets or words, they just need to be felt.



‘I want to come home

And see your face again.’

That was all he wrote

Until the page burns into nothing

along with him as well.




He died :-( .whyyy? this is so sad. we knew that this would happen eventually but still it hurts.

overall, its a great poem, keep it up.
excited for more.
thank you
lolita





You wake up in the morning and it feels impossible? Good. You do it anyway.
— Martin Scorcese