MEOW! Hello, friend! My name is Ellie and today I will be reviewing using my very own Black Cat Review Method! It is very similar to the incredible YWS S'more Method but I have Halloween-ified it and made it spooky! My little black cat friend, Vladimir, wants to offer his opinion on your amazing literary piece:
Mystical Witch Hat - What I See, Observe, and Interpret
First impression- this is so incredibly beautiful, Leya 
I love the painting at the top! Is it yours or where did you get that, so so pretty!
It's extraordinary how much I love you,
but I wish I didn't,
This is such an awesome opening. The first line really got me- wow, a love poem how sweet! And then reading the second line really changed the way I thought about it. This is not just an 'I love you' poem. Three words can be so much more than those three. Perhaps 'I hate you' words too.
But you know I love you,
so it doesn't matter.
Right?
I love how you included the 'right?' at the end. That makes this poem feel so much more like a conversation. That really brings out the heartfelt, confrontational, heartbroken, in love, everything in between-ness of this poem. Well done with that. I thought the tone was very clear and your voice is very strong.
And I wanted to mention the same thing here:
I meant it.
Is this a game to you?
I love the progression of this poem. We start out with what seemed like a love note, but now it is so much more. This is a confession of love, yes, but it is also a confession of hurt and heartache and a longing for this person to do more. I see so many people, situations, past and present, in these words. Good job writing relatable poetry!
Vladimir’s Advice - Suggestions for Improvement
I'm scared I'll lose my mind to your justified,
actions of discipline and abandonment.
This section stood out to me. It is a beautiful sentence, but the comma after the word justified threw me off a little bit. Justified actions seems to flow better than justified, actions.
how your voice changes when you're speaking on the phone,
the simple things.
Perhaps adding a period instead of a comma after the word phone. I love how flows your poetry is and how it carries on from line to line, but perhaps using periods and commas in a way to show literal phrases. For example, a period represents an end, which a comma represents moving forward. So maybe a period after phone would show some of that emotion.
Jack O’Lanterns - My Favourite Parts and Praises
I adore the way you carry yourself,
how you shrug at the slightest inconvenience,
how your voice changes when you're speaking on the phone,
the simple things.
.
But you only adore me because I said those three words.
I really love this ending, Leya! I love the contrast of love and hate in this poem. I enjoyed how you ended by listing things you adore, but closed with that statement of loneliness, also bringing back the 'three words'. Brilliant job with that!!
Black Cat Cuddles - Concluding Ideas and Thoughts
Thank you for sharing this lovely poem! I love the visual of it too. So well done!!
Your friend,
Ellie
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