Hello Again, My Friend!
This was a great new installment in your circus collection! The very concept of the marionette has so much rich symbolism, and knowing the pretenses with "Circus Freak" and "Circus Rose," it's very fitting. The idea that the conflict is still there, "this ain't over yet," but you're bound by strings to that person is so chilling and speaks to a complex, layered connection between "puppet" and "master of puppets."
- cue Metallica riff (sorry I had to say it XD)
*Ahem, as for a more technical review, I don't have much to complain about. Punctuating the lines may help them flow better, but as I think I mentioned before, that's a very subjective matter when it comes to lyrics and poetry. It's also hard to judge how well lyrics work without a melody to place to them, but I wanted to propose one idea for your chorus. Since the term "marionette" is already used toward its beginning, maybe that final line would be a little more catchy by replacing "marionette" with "puppet"? Less specific, but same gist.
"Give me your ticket, the puppet show will be on in a minute
Just a thought, free to take or leave. And of course, I am not a professional, so please always take my advice with a grain of salt ~
As far as favorite lines go, man, you gave me a challenge with this one. I really like the end of the bridge here:
Do not pity the crushed rose, Thou not knoweth whom thy thorns have snared
the clowns have painted smiles on their faces, as if they ever really cared
I love the idea of painted smiles, pretending to care, and that sort of warning with the line on the crushed rose. Very cool ~
I also thought this line tied in really well with your last installments:
You used to be part of the team, then you turned "normal" and broke my dream...
The idea of turning "normal" and breaking the dream speaks well, to a betrayal of the "circus" and the narrator by extension.
Overall, another great piece! Nicely done!
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