Young Writers Society

Hey, this is AkuRashomon and I am here to give a little comment or review.

First of all, I do like the neatness of each verse and I like the fact that I can smell flowers while reading this. With the repeating ABAB pattern of rhyming and starting your poem with

Go where

and start the rest of the other lines with

where

This poem feels like opening/entering a world thaf starts with the season spring. The last poem had the pattern AABB though but that's alright. I'mma give your poem a 8 out of 10. Good job!

Hellooo Rebel! Here to leave a review. Hope you're hungry because I'll be serving an original Oreo cookie style commentary. I've spent some time away from YSW, but am eager to keep my consistency as I continue writing my novel and intend to get back into writing in general. This poem immediately caught my eye as it is new and the title is reminiscent of Where the Wild Things Are

Let's get into the review....

Crunchy Exterior: My initial impressions
This presents itself as a picturesque invitation to a natural paradise. The opening lines set the scene with a vivid blooming of wildflowers, a red moon hovering in the sky, and towering trees. It inspires a whimsicality and encourages those who read it to explore their natural curiosity, growth, and wild nature.

Particularly, the last stanza stands out:

Go where you may find them all,
Where prophets dream and sleep withal,
Where I can write, sing, dance and prance
And get lost in a weary, poetic trance.

Creamy Center: Key Elements
The rhyme scheme is MUCH appreciated. ABAB is very traditional, creates a nice rhythm and flow, and attends towards a structured song-like quality. I did note that the last stanza is AABB which allows it to end in a summarized final format. There is some GREAT vocab here. The following words stand out as rich and thick: nigh, petrify, oft', chirrups, wry, withal, and weary. I always appreciate word choice and specific words can change meaning, enhance readability or depth of a work, and compel readers to learn new vocabulary words they may not otherwise have known. The overall message, tone, and theme in this poem fit the title nicely with a continued inspiring image of going where one is free and wild.

Twist & Dunk Factor: Scale Rating
Twisting apart an Oreo and dunking it in milk adds an extra layer of enjoyment to one's experience with the cookie. On a scale of 0-10 on the pleasure I got from this piece, I would give this a 10. It feels old-timey like a poet from yesteryear or long ago wrote it. I can see it featured in a collection of works and its message is timelessly inspiring.


Variety Pack: Highlights to Enhance
There is really no highlight or variety to add to improve, tweak, or suggest any errors or the like. I absolutely find this to be "wordery" (wizardry + words). Bravo!


Final Dunk & Conclusion
"Go Where the Wild Flowers Bloom" is a simple poem encouraging all who stumble upon it to embrace the part of themselves and the world around them that is passionate, creative, and free to be. Thank you for sharing this!

Wishing you well wherever you are in the world.


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