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The Adventures of Rose Hood Chapter 30: A Slothful Day

by keeperofgaming


Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence.

I flew for a straight hour and saw my home base, the capital.

When I landed at the gate, Dallel came to greet me.

“Hello Rose.”

I shifted.

“Hello Dallel. Your brother is annoying.”

“I thought he was dead.”

“He should be. He already has been, but I’ve had to put that man six-feet-under three times now.”

“I'm... not even going to ask.”

“Thanks.”

_

“So, you have some charges.”

Mammon held up a paper labeled with the insignia of the guild.

“Read them.”

"Destroying the economy of a nation, insubordination, and killing a guildmaster.”

“Hold it, that’s false.”

“Thank goodness, wel-”

“I didn’t kill him. I just shattered his mind. Besides how was I supposed to know his mind was so weak.”

“Ah... and for the others?”

“Those are true. Except that the economy was slavery, and the insubordination was karate chopping him after he ordered his men to strip me.”

“Ah... that makes sense and aligns with what the submaster of the other place reported.”

“So, am I still a B.”

“Nope, A. You were found innocent of most charges already, so your promotion already went through.”

“Nice.”

“But try not to **** off a whole nation next time.”

“I will.”

Then I felt a presence of pure rage behind me. I shivered.

“Pardon, what did this other guild master tell his men to do?”

“Um................”

Dallel looked like he was about to commit murder. Mammon clearly thought the same thing.

“D-Dallel, no killing the head guildmaster of Stalaris.”

“Don’t worry. I’ll just do a little surgery.”

“No... don’t do that either.”

“Surgery helps though, I thought you were angry.”

The whole guild looks at me.

“YOU ARE TOO INNOCENT!!!”

What?

_

“So, the demons now follow you?”

“Yes, they disguised it as thanks for me killing Callel, FOR THE THIRD TIME, but they told me through telepathy that they recognized me.”

I was talking to Dallel and Royce, they were the only two in the nation that knew my identity as a shard of the evil god.

“So, what happened to that other shard you mentioned?”

“We merged.”

Royce spat out his water and started coughing.

“What?”

“She embodied sloth and was tired of all the work.”

“Okay.”

“Hey, Rose.”

Mammon called.

“Yes?”

“Can you come and help me?”

“Can I do it later?”

I put my head down on the table... so... tired.

“What?”

“Can I do it later? I’m tired.”

“Okay?”

“Can definitely see that it embodied sloth.”

“Hm?”

“You usually aren’t so lazy.”

“I’m just tired. Why would I do work while tired?”

“Because you usually do.”

“I do? That’s dumb.”

Now that I think about it, I do usually work until I collapse.

“Maybe the shard gave me sense.”

The duo looked at me with unconvinced eyes.

“Go help Mammon.”

“Okay. Mammon, I can help now.”

“Okay good, I thought ye were sick for a second.”

_

“So, I need to get that down.”

“What is it?”

“It’s a rune, reacts to all demons other than Zath, but it’s gone haywire lately, keeps freaking out.”

“When did it start?”

“Today, shortly after you... came back... Rose, do you have a demon?”

“After defeating the dungeon master, the demons all decided to serve me as thanks... they hated him.”

“I could imagine, so it’s just reacting to you.”

“Yep.”

“Well... could you still get it down... Rose?”

ZZZZZZZZ

“ROSE?”

“WHA? HUH? Oh sorry, did I fall asleep?”

“Yes, are you sure you aren’t sick?”

“Yes.”

I jumped up and gave it to him.

“Thanks... maybe ya should take a day off, lassie. You don’t seem well.”

“Thanks.”

I walked out of the guild confused why everyone was looking at me with concern.

_

“That was odd.”

Dallel and I had the same idea. We knew that each of the Shards had some aspect that was related to evil, but I wasn’t expecting Sloth to affect her so badly. The guild definitely thought something was odd, but the most terrifying part, was how happy Zath looked.

I went up to him and cast a silence. Only I could hear him and only he could hear me.

“Zath, what’s going on?”

“The mistress is getting purer. Could you not feel her radiance.”

“What happens when she merges with the rest of the shards.”

“She gains more aspects of evil until she awakens, then, the whole world will be at her disposal. The rest of the gods bound her out of fear of her grace and power.”

“Just out of curiosity, what aspect is Rose.”

“The First Core Lie.”

“What’s that?”

“Innocence.”

“That makes a lot of sense. Is that why she never gets any adult jokes while still being aware of adult concepts?”

“Indeed.”

“What are the other lies?”

“Peace, and Benevolence.”

“What happens if she merges with them?”

“She will be the kindest and most compassionate person ever known, until she gets the rest of the shards. Then the concept of lies will come to full fruition as she destroys the world that grew to trust her.”

“You...”

“I haven’t done anything. Even if she is unaware of it, her own nature calls to gathering up. The Seven Deadly Sins, and The Three Core Lies. Put together she will destroy the whole world.”

“Then why are you so happy. She’d kill you too.”

His eyes seemed to expand as though he were in love.

“There would be nothing I would love more than being annihilated with the rest of this world.”

“You are insane.”

“I’m a demon king. It would be foolish to believe otherwise.”

I walked away and grabbed Dallel.

“We need to talk.”

“What did he say?”

“Something important. We need to tell Rose.”

_

“So, if I continue gathering shards, I’ll destroy the world?”

“That’s what Zath said, the weirdo seemed happy about it too.”

“Huh, why would I do that though?”

“I know it-”

“Seems like too much work.”

“Eh?”

“Wait... why would I say that?”

I shot up. What I said was nothing like I would normally say.

“It’s already taking hold.”

“I think so.”

“It makes sense. You are one of the lies, the one that speaks of purity. You gathered a sin. You would be affected by it.”

“I guess, but I don’t like it.”

“Neither do I. Can you silence it entirely?”

“I could try.”

I laid back on my bed and focused.

‘Sloth, could you not interfere?’

‘Why? You need to sleep more, Innocence.’

‘My name is Rose.’

‘Pwah. Too much to remember. Eh the less work I have to do, the better. I’ll just sleep myself.’

I opened my eyes.

“It worked; she was just happy to not do any work.”

“I guess that makes sense, but you should still take the day off.”

“Why would I do that?”

They smiled.

“What?”


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Hello Again, My Friend!

It's me, Raven, and I'd like to review the next chapter in this great story using my Familiar method! Let's dive in, shall we? Heh heh heh...

What The Black Eyes See...

Loved this! Rose getting acquainted with this new shard, while we learn more about their individual identities and what they mean from Zath, was super cool and builds up a new theme as Rose continues her adventures. Let's get into the details though.

Where The Dagger Points...

No complaints for content, I really enjoyed this chapter! There were two very minor spots where, in good faith, I would recommend a little grammar touchup:

“I didn’t kill him. I just shattered his mind. Besides how was I supposed to know his mind was so weak.”


Perhaps a comma after "besides" here, and a question mark to punctuate? And one more question mark here:

“So, am I still a B.”


Both very minor as I mentioned. Overall, great writing job!

Why The Grin Widened...

I really liked Dallel in this chapter (tbh he's probably one of my favorites in this story overall). Like, when Rose brought up Callel and how he's technically died three times, this response...

“I'm... not even going to ask.”


Simple but sweet, that sounds like an annoyed and fed-up brother for sure, haha. Proceeding to the meeting with Mammon, great to know Rose got that promotion! She deserved it after having to put up with Callel and the "lolimaster," heh. Also, as she described what her charges were about and what was done to her, Dallel's reaction was brilliant:

“Don’t worry. I’ll just do a little surgery.”


"Just a little surgery," haha. And Rose's innocent response was as adorable as it always is. Then, moving on, I found it interesting that Rose was slowing down, like Sloth was taking over, and the way Zath explained these shards fascinated me:

“I haven’t done anything. Even if she is unaware of it, her own nature calls to gathering [them] up. The Seven Deadly Sins, and The Three Core Lies. Put together she will destroy the whole world.”


Not only did it explain a lot about Rose's character, her being a certain type of shard, but it also explained what others may be like (should these heroes continue finding them, although it sounds like that would be a really bad thing). That's a super cool theme, and a great clue to keep an eye out for potential shard-bearers in the future.

And just saying, I'm not so confident that I'll make any declarations, but I already have a theory forming that Asura could be somehow associated with wrath XD

‘Pwah. Too much to remember. Eh the less work I have to do, the better. I’ll just sleep myself.’


Well...At least Sloth is easy to handle, haha.

Our Mad Thoughts...

Overall, great chapter, and I plan to read the next one today so stay tuned for another review. In the meantime, nicely done! :D

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Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Shalt we commence with the review?

Top Graham Cracker - Rose has gained new knowledge of herself, but with this new knowledge comes the threat of becoming something evil…

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - If you wanted to, you could put the “zzz” in italics. But other than that, it’s fine.

Chocolate Bar - I love that we’re learning more about Rose’s nature. She represents Innocence as if right now, and that fits her perfectly. How long she’ll be innocent will be determined.

Closing Graham Cracker - Rose has defeated the Sloth shard, and as a result, gained the Sloth trait. However, as long as she can keep it at bay, she’ll be alright.

PS: Let me know if you want me to review part two of “The Prime Control”.

I wish you a fantastic day/night! :>






If you could review it it would be cool

Thanks for the review





Though I do want to make sure you do realize that it goes. Chapter 1 part 1 > chapter 1 part 2 > chapter 2 part 1 > Chapter 2 part 2 for chronological.





Okay





Nice




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