Hiiiiii, this is AkuRashomon and I am here to give a mere review/comment. I have class in 30 minutes
How is it possible that I almost caught feelings for someone who's not mine?
She already claimed you.
I was the one who introduced y'all to each other.
She calls you 'her man'.
She talks about you like she owns you.
This first part is a good entrance. You can feel the hatred yet sadness in the tone of how you read it. It is kinda giving Oliva Rodrigo, Conan Gray, Ariana Grande, NIKI vibes. It also reminds of those movies where a guy has a girl best friend and that best friend falls in love with him but he has already found someone else. The line, "She talks about you like she owns you" just hurt, man. And it tells me that the guy/person that the narrator is talking about is a prize that his girl won while the narrator yearns for his love.
I never really realized how handsome you look when you smile.
Did you notice that we were matching today?
Our outfits matched.
My Royal Blue nail polish matched your hat and jacket.
I asked you to hold my drink.
I didn't want it anymore and said that you could throw it away.
You drank out of it instead.
Now the narrator pities herself and gives small details about how they are similar
I was shocked.
You happily stared at me while you drank out of my cup.
She saw you do it too.
She rolled her eyes and had a jealous look on her face.
Just think about it, we would be perfect together.
But no instead, you 'chose' her
Do you even like her?
This is where the narrator gets confused too but she enjoys the fact that his girl is jealous. She questions his decision making, making him sound like a player. It is like the verse and chorus in Heather by Conan Gray. The guys in the song kisses the narrator but he would still chose someone else in the end AKA Heather.
She's my best friend and I would never do anything to hurt her, right?
Especially not on her birthday!
You didn't even tell her 'Happy Birthday.'
I wish I talked to you first.
We could've been good together.
It's too late now.
She already claimed you.
I wish I talked to you first...
Now, that is messed up! She's the narrator's best friend?! This poem is spicier than I thought! You should make this at least 12+for a little mature content because it is a bit juicy. The fact that the girl he is with is the narrator's bestie just makes it more painful and it's her birthday party. Over all, this is great. I did this speed run because of my class. I hope you like this review like how I like your poem. It is a freestyle that could be turned into a sad girl/boy vibe pop song >.<
- AkuRashomon
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