i wrote this poem ages ago, about 2 years for english i believe. we than had to attach an explanation. please don't be as brutal as others were in my last post. i'm weak and can't take a mass amount of criticism without some sort of encouragement.
She sits at her chair,
As fragile as a porcelain doll
Her hands like claws
Her legs as pale as the winter snow
She stares at the paints before her
The brush, but a few paces away
Eyes upon her, wearing encouraging faces
Like she is a baby, taking her first steps
But the girl just stares
Her face a blank canvas
She is a butterfly in a cacoon
A delicate beauty on the inside
A mound of nothing on the outside
She beats her frustrated wings
Against her prison walls
She is trapped, unable to show her true self
The others break free,
She knows it in her heart
Like gazelles in the air, they fly
“Why can’t I?”
The girl swings her clumsy hand
And knocks the paint to floor
The voices sigh and say “One day”
She raises her brittle head
Slowly and carefully, like a cat
Her piercing eyes meet mine
“When is that day?”
This poem is about a girl with a disability. The words give us a picture of a fragile girl attempting to paint. People watch and encourage but it is simply impossible for her to break through the barriers of her disability. There are many examples of the use of metaphors; however the most important being the comparison with a butterfly. The girl is a butterfly in the sense that she is trapped in a body that cannot do what she wants it to do, as the beauty of a butterfly is trapped by a cacoon. There are also many examples of similes; “as fragile as porcelain”, “hands like claws”, “as pale as the winter snow” and “like gazelles in the air, they fly”.
The poem creates a mood of want and frustration. We read how the girl struggles. It is written in a somewhat intimate way, it is the girl’s deepest feelings. I would say there is also an air of reflection, in the sense that she is exploring and reflecting on her feelings.
The purpose is to give insight on what it would be like to live in a body with no control. The frustration and struggle for acceptance and independence. It is written both for people with needs and without, to help relate and understand.
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