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Mage Chronicles: Draft Two



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Wed Nov 08, 2017 12:25 pm
ShadowPrincess16 says...



Hey all! So, I first posted Mage Chronicles here about a year (maybe less?) ago. I've since completely revamped it and finished it for the second time. I'm looking for someone to read through it and pretty much point out anything that needs fixing. Grammar, plot issues, romance issues, worldbuilding. Whatever needs to be fixed, go ahead and point it out.

Mage Chronicles is a fantasy/romance that deals with LGBT relationships and family dynamics.
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