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The door slid open. “First day of school, everybody.” A red- colored hair boy said as he slung his arm around two girls, both around his age. One was a tall blond-haired girl who groaned and threw the boy’s arm off of her. “Oh come on, Chelsea, you know you like me.” Said the redhead, still hanging on the other girl.
“Maybe in your dreams, Victor.” Chelsea remarked as she picked up her huge chapter books. The other three high school kids were already in the bus, but Victor, Chelsea, and the other girl that was so attached to Victor stood for a moment.
Victor gathered himself together and walked up to the steps. “Let’s go, slowpokes, come on, Brittany, I’ll find us a seat.” Brittany, a short, attractive dark-colored haired girl, giggled and ran up the stairs after him.
“High school.” Chelsea muttered as she walked up to the bus.
The inside was partially crowded, with all of the young kids sitting three to a seat and throwing paper and pieces of chewed up gum at each other. The middle school kids, as usual sat in the middle of the bus, keeping to themselves, while the back twelve seats were reserved for the small number of high school people who ride that bus.
In fact, there were only six people going to the high school, and they were all at that bus stop. Victor sat in one of the middle seats, osmosing into Brittany as she sat next to him, giggling all the while. Chelsea sat by herself across from Victor, while the other three high schoolers sat in the last seats.
The three other high schoolers didn’t say much, they kept to themselves the entire time on the bus, making no note to even talk to the three freshmen.
One of the elementary kids, a dark colored boy, looked at Brittany. “You’re cute!” Brittany giggled all over herself and whipped her hair back and forth.
“Little dude, she’s taken.” Victor smiled as the boy frowned and turned around in his seat.
The bus lurched to a halt. “Last stop for y’all middle kids.” The last of the middle schoolers got off at a large middle school, elaborate enough to be a private school.
The elementary kids slowly weaned until the only people who were on the bus were the bus driver and the high schoolers.
The driver lurched as he stopped the bus unexpectedly. “Last stop.” He said. Chelsea got up and waited for the other high schoolers to pass.
Victor and Brittany had almost undressed each other making love, and had not noticed the bus stopping.
“Oh, grow up you two, we’re here if you haven’t noticed.”
“You have to ruin all the fun, Chelsea! Let’s go, Brittany.” Brittany giggled as she pulled the strap of her shirt back up. Victor zipped his pants back up as he stood, waiting for Brittany to get up.
Brittany ran down the aisle with Victor right behind her. Chelsea sighed and slowly walked down the aisle. “First day of school, huh?”
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