Young Writers Society

Why Jenny left Justin

Dear Jenny,
It seems so long ago yet it wasn’t. Mere hours ago you still loved me, and I loved you. Not that I don’t love you now of course. But you don’t love me back.
My heart bleeds but soon it will scar and toughen. Even if it will lessen the pain I don’t want that; I want you. You are perfection, once you have perfection it is hard, if at all possible to move on. My first love. My only love. My best friend. Closer than family. They say young love never lasts I don’t agree. I will always love you, even when you have forgotten me. After all we may never see each other again.
I want to say I am sorry, no, I am not asking for forgiveness I don’t deserve it. I only want to offer an explanation and my apology.
I should have told you and asked for your opinion, I know that now.

Ending #1
It was so cute, I couldn’t help myself I knew you were allergic but I got her anyway. I will name her Jenny, after you. I am sorry I got a puppy.

Love,
Justin

Ending #2
When I told you I thought you would be proud of me, and happy I had finally found something worth doing with my life. Those kids need me, and as much as I would like to bail and stay with you I know I must help them, give them a better chance. It would be selfish to put my own feelings before the lives of those starving, homeless, orphaned and most of all uneducated African children. I will be teaching them all how to read, and do math. I will teach them about life, and maybe even love.
I am sorry, but I have no regrets.

Love,
Justin


Critiques welcome! This is my first "romantic" piece. I think it was good practice because I have no dealings in romance myself, also Ending one is suposed to be relitively ridiculous.

Well, if that's all you got, it would be wise to lengthen it.
If it was just practice, then okay. I think you could get even more practice if you gave us a background of sorts like how they met and what exactly did go wrong. The whole letter thing is a bit cliche, and kind of akward to read with nothing else to it. We have no story line or plot. It just is. You made Justin kind of ramble. I think even if you just expanded on the letter it would be great. Maybe also add to Jenny's part? This was short, yet sweet. I'd love to read a follow-up after some corrections or rearranging has been done. Of course, #2 was the best.

Hey, Zellie!

Haha! So you finally began posting here! I win! *maniacal laughter*


*hem*, sorry...


I think that the letters got sort of scrambled you should have it bold where it says
'Ending #1' and 'Ending #2' otherwise, awesome!