I loved the fatal attraction part at the end(:. I thought this story was put togetrher in a hurry and should be in more detailed and more lengthy. I love how you make your points but I think you could add more to it, and it could be alot better. I loved how you wrote it. Good job.
I love how it's written in "poem form". It's very interesting and it explains a lot. I didn't find any mistakes but overall I thought it was really good. :3
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