I was hilarious! I couldn't stop giggling. It flowed wonderfully, and I couldn't ask you to change a thing! Keep on writing!
There once was a women named Kent, Whose nose was rather quite bent. One day I suppose, She followed her nose, And nobody knows where she went. -Unknown
Wow, great twist! I never saw it coming. Your style is different, it's very real. It had a nice flow and pace, and I never once suspected that Dana was a fire hydrant. xD When you said Dana wasn't human, I almost expected her to be a supernatural creature. Fresh and new, this is the kind of writing style you don't see everyday. Great job; keep writing!
Niiice work 
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