Young Writers Society

i like your title, it makes a person stop and wonder what's up. also, the 'lisp' Cecelia has appears to be a result of her perverted father's abuse and makes it even more realistic.
only thing wrong that i see are the gigantic words you use. is a guy who gets his tenses mixed up going to know words like 'granoblastically' or 'erogenous'?
other than that, great job. very disturbing.

Kind of disturbing and graphic, but a good read nonetheless. Innocent, charming Cecilia was a great foil for her domineering, possessive father. The introduction of the story was well done; you whetted my curiousity without giving much away. With every peice of information the narrator revealed about himself, the more suspenseful the story became--and the more I found myself rooting for Hugh.

Two complaints I have, however are:
1) I don't really think this story was suitable for kids under, what, fourteen? Could you please put that in the subject heading of your story? The "bedroom" descriptions were a little...well, strong at times. Thanks.
2) I wasn't a fan of the big vocabulary you used. Just my opinion.