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Wed Apr 27, 2005 8:08 pm
Little Dreamer says...



Prologue
Do you remember when you were young, I do. Id give anything to go back just to fall in love with the man whos now my husband of 15 years. We met in high school and I knew it was love at first site, I was friends with his girlfriend at that time and envied her every time I saw her with him. He was one of those guys that you felt like you were falling into a black abyss for and would die if you didnt have him. Well before I go on any further let me introduce myself to you, my name is Crystal Rivers I'am not as young as I used to be but however I never regreat falling in love with Jonathon Summers.
Chapter One (Fall, 1950)
"Hey Crystal." Yelled my best friend Amber Jenkins. I looked in the direction I had heard her voice, she was trying to make her way through the chaotic cluster of students in her way.
(thats all I have time for)
see people with your heart and not your eyes
  





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Thu Apr 28, 2005 12:34 am
ohhewwo says...



It wasn't enough to get into, but I'll be sure to read your next entry of this.

The first sentence of the prologue sounded too essay-y to me. I think it should be changed.
  








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