Hey everyone, this is a preface to the novel that i have started writing. I hope you guys enjoy and I hope you can give me some constructive criticism.
Preface
She wasn’t thinking, that was sure. The events of the day had passed by in a translucent blur, and she realized that she was able to remember very little of what had happened. Her thoughts were fuzzy, and the memories running through her head were far from perceptible. In fact, she couldn’t recognize any of the recollections. In some, she could only perceive the rainy backdrop. Others were vivid and apparent. The tears which were streaming down her cheeks were definitely not helping the situation. Wheezing heavily between sobs, she groped for a tissue to wipe away the mucus which was dribbling down her nose. Her gorgeous satin gown was in tatters, the loose fabric barely covering her bodice due to the day’s events. Her shoes had been kicked off and were lying on the other side of the room. The lovely black strands of hair which were previously framed intricately around her face were now disheveled and unkempt. She was absolutely miserable.
She didn’t even notice the tall elegant figure approaching her through the doorway until he hesitantly knocked. Startled, she glanced up from the fetal position she had taken on the bed.
Oh no. He can’t see me like this. Please don’t see me like this.
The tall figure walked the length of the room and sat on the bed, his movements almost cat like. Without saying a word, he brushed the tears away from her cheeks, and smoothed her hair. He picked up the ends of the white, linen hospital sheets and drew them over her figure towards her shoulders. Tucking her in delicately, he kissed her forehead and gave her a solemn look. She knew what he was thinking.
If I could do anything, I would.
But she knew he couldn’t. There was nothing he could do this time.
He held her face gently, and, gazing into her deep brown eyes, he let his lips meet hers. The kiss was brief, but for both of them, it was something that they would remember forever. They had both wanted this for so long, and now it was finally happening. It was definitely not the best timing, but at least it had happened.
When he pulled back, he saw the shock in her eyes. He could taste the fear on her tongue. She locked her arms around his neck and, leaning forward, kissed him again, this time more fervently.
Just then, there was a knock on the door. They both pulled apart immediately. The tall figure began to amble out the entryway, but she caught him off guard. She grabbed his hand, and when he turned back, she almost whimpered the words “Don’t go.”
That was all it took for him to sit next to her throughout the night, and for the many days that she would stay in the hospital afterward.
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