Young Writers Society

Voldaphone Bellackberry
Received messages
16/1/96

Bella: im finly outa jail. wats d plan?

Voldy: 2moro, ur sis' place. tel u evrythin der.

Bella: K. cnt w8 2 c u!

Voldy: =)

17/1/96

Voldy: How woz i?

Bella: Gr8! sexier dan eva!so confidt n 4ceful! luv it! Ur gettin better n better at dis evil/bad guy thing!

Voldy: nt lyk rod am i?

Bella: dat incompetnt twat! ur nt lyk him @ all, ur evrytin he isnt: useful, intlignt, sly, HOT!

Voldy: ur hotta dan eva 2. wat hav u been doin in jail?

Bella: nuthin. cursin doZ effin aurors. d usual. u lyk my hair?

Voldy: dat's wat lyk most n ur sarcazm. babe, hv 2 c u. Meet me u kno wer

Bella: im meetin u kno hu u kno wer! xD! i'l be der bby

Voldy: dnt keep me w8in

Bella: lol dnt get firm wit me, im nt 1 of d oders

Voldy: cors ur nt. ur my bella cullen n i luv u. c u 2nyt

Bella: my sexi tommy! luv u 2!

Voldy: dnt cal me dat. reminds me of my filthy muggle dad.

18/1/96


Bella: i had a gr8 tym. Thx 4 evrythin. B-in alone wit u woz jus perfect!

Voldy: Yeah, it was

Bella: i cnt imagin n-e thin mor perfect!

Voldy: i can: harry potter dead >=D

Bella: xD Yeah!

Voldy: Nxt tym we go on a d8, we'l b celbr8in his death ryt?

Bella: ryt. n dat'l b soon!

Voldy: Very soon xD! N i'l get rid of all who go against me. Tho dats nt new...

Bella: n den we'l leav, jus d 2 of us. no 1 2 bother us! no mor rod or n-e 1. no mor potter. jus u n me rulin dis world n out wit muggle borns 4eva!

Voldy: n we'l share our perfect forbidn kisses

Bella: <3 kissin u is so easy. rod's nose is always in d way o.O

Voldy: xD! im jelus. hey did u jus insult me?

Bella: no. lol. Y r u jelous?

Voldy: coz he cn kiss u gudnyt

Bella: dnt b. u'l soon gt dat chance, dnt wory

Voldy: gudnyt my luv. luk in d sky u c dat ornge star? it's 4 u

Bella: i luv u. thx 4 d star, its sendin u all my kisses. gudnyt

Voldy: say hi to rod 4 me

Bella: wtf?

Voldy:LOL! xD go 2 bed! <3

Bella: stop pretendin 2 b mean wit me! <3

Voldy: sorry, gess d at jus gets hold of me sumtymes. Nyt!

I know this is supposed to be written the way a text is, but let's get real, no one texts like this. Even people that text like "hey bb sup wit u?" still do not type as extreme as you've done it here. I honestly could not understand everything they were saying. Also, this whole thing is a tad unbelievable. You've made the characters much too mushy. It's VOLDEMORT and a death eater! It was a decent idea, but it wasn't executed as well as it could have been. I hope this helped, cheers

*edited* I msut have been really tired when I wrote this...

Interesting.
I'm sure it was hard to write in text-speak. I don't think I could do it.

Voldy: How woz i?

Bella: Gr8! sexier dan eva!so confidt n 4ceful!

Um...Maybe I have a dirty mind, but this sounded so wrong. I thought maybe I had taken it really out of context, but there were some other sexual references in it. Was that intentional?