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Dumping The Boy



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Thu Nov 24, 2011 11:59 pm
FreshMeat says...



Deleted for plagiarism.
“People have a habit of inventing fictions they will believe wholeheartedly in order to ignore the truth they cannot accept.”
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Fri Nov 25, 2011 12:22 am
bagelbaby says...



I love this.. SO MUCH. This part's true with a lot of girls because lots of guys are stupid :)

I hate your stupid friends. Every time I step into a room and they’re there, I feel as if I lose IQ points.


But that's not the point here. This was too good. Thanks for writing this.. It made my day! :D
-bagelbaby <3





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Fri Nov 25, 2011 12:53 am
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shiney1 says...



Hmm...

Honestly I liked and did not like this at the same time. I have to say, this is pretty well-thought through when you look at it. I love the originality and the smoothness, and it's got attitude, which adds points for voice. I'm glad this is not another one of those annoying cliche break-up sob stories I see so much on YWS.

But, when you really look at this form, I doubt the guy will be the one with the actual problem. A snobbish sounding girl like this will have a pretty tough time finding love if this what she looks at and the attitude she carries around while doing it. Plus, many of these things is what makes a person who they are, so that guy will have to change himself a lot to satisfy her.

But, that is the only problem I, personally, had with this. Overall it's a pretty cool idea.
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Fri Nov 25, 2011 3:59 pm
Lumi says...



Locked for plagiarism.
I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.
-Shinji Moon


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