Young Writers Society

I was bored, and there are some ork's heavy accent in there. SO good luck readin' dat.
It was based off of a game campaign I played.
I basically covered the whole story.

"Da uuver boyz are all fightin' each other,
while da chaos boyz are comin' ta slaughter.
Bash dere 'eads quick before dey come,
dose chaos boyz will run for dere mum.
My name is Gorgutz and Im da best,
uuver orks follow me,
as I lead da great quest.
Dem umies are fighting too,
for dat great fing in da ground,
Wiv chaos dats two.
We'll clobber 'em good,
dey'll all run away,
for fear of our WAAAGH,
dey will all pay."

"Gorgutz take one step closer and Ill remove your head,
that Titan is ours,
go near it your dead.
The humans are here,
theyll come for you too,
then they'll take the Titan,
and then kill you."

"Emperor! Orks! Why are they near?
I thought it was chaos,
they're the ones here!
We must get that Titan,
no matter the plan,
Emperor protects us,
to every last man!"

"Eldar are here!
Dey got a pretty skull,
skullz for my pointy stick,
Skullz like Crull,
da chaos lord,
He sayz dat he's strong,
more den he can 'ford,
he wont last long.
Off ta fight da Eldar, who knowz
why dere here,
da Titan must be pretty good,
for that whimpy Eldar Seer."

"My last battle here along side you filthy aliens,
instead of general Sturnn,
A great man like he,
Is what we all yearn, to be.
He died to the orks,
the most savage of nuts,
their leader they call,
Warboss Gorgutz."

"Agh! Eldar, Orks, and those Humans are here!
We all want that Titan,
I have nothing to fear.
Charge the front line!
We'll rip them to shreds,
that Titan is mine."

"Da Titan iz mine,
it makes you blind.
Of winnin' da fight,
da orks' greatest might!"

"The Titan is ours,
We're getting it out.
We'll shoot them all,
until they all rout.
A great victory for man,
we'll do anything we can."

"The Titan is ours, we'll fight to the death!"

I thought that this was great! You got in the wrong forum, should be in poetry, but no biggie.

The flow is done well and the dialogue is excellent.

i like this, it was a little hard to understand and it got a bit confusing at time when you changed points of veiw, it was also a little hard to read, i was able to read most of it but what are all these different things like chaos, eldars and such. also does uuver mean "other" that confuzed me a bit. its a very nice tought ; what exactaly is the titan, or did you just make that up for them to fight over. this could also be turned into a very action packed all out war story/book. this also could be the beginning of a series; like i explained this has great potential, but i agree with brian it seems alittle out of place in this forum, but very good job.