The only thing I really disliked about this piece were the minor spelling errors. Just little things really.
Should have a 'k' instead of a 'c' at the beginning.sceptically
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Regardless, I really enjoyed this. I will definitely read more if you decide to continue, but its pretty interesting as is. I think if you tweaked it a bit it'd be great. But I did really like it.
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