Ah. I am going to feel useless after everyone just gave you deep crits. But they took all the crit up what can I say? Hmm...some people were just slightly harsh, but I pretty much disagree with anything that was negetive. I liked the storyline, I found it to be very interesting and if you pm me again to let me know there's more I'll definately read it and crit it for you---:P good job! All I can say is that although you didn't create extremely strong characters at first meeting, I'm sure you'll develop them and let the readers get to know them throughout.
Over and Out--
Misty Lynn
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