Hi! Well, I'm working on this story and I may take quite a while to put up the next chapters as I'm just getting accustomed to the hectic life of a college girl. Anyway please critique the story. Also, the first chapter may not give out much, please be patient.
Also, the title is temporary as I can't think of anything else. Suggestions for title highly appreciated
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"Beep-Beep." I hear the alarm go and the next instant my face was bathed in white light. Rubbing out the sand from my eyes, I stretch and get up. I cross out another day of existence on the calendar. I walk up to the sink and brush my teeth. Watching the automatic tap stop gushing out water, I think of my routine. It's been the same for the past 17 years. There has been no surprises, my birthday gifts had always been a large chocolate cake. I have always worn white clothes, either white pant or a white skirt. My hair was always trimmed to an exact length and I was never to let it loose. This expanse of whiteness will be the cause of my death I'm sure.
Now, I'm standing under the shower, looking at the white wall, through the droplets of water sticking to my eyelashes. Sometimes, I think my life is one big white canvas, waiting to be splashed with colours. I just wonder how much longer I'd have to wait. I put on my white suit, the one which has a striped collar and pull up my hair in a ponytail. I look at the pale white face staring at me through the mirror. I have always longed to have rich chocolate-like skin that Carmen has. Or a face with lots of dark spots, like Rufus. It adds variety to the face, I feel. Rufus and Carmen are my friends, I like them. They visit me often, sometimes together, sometimes with serious-looking friends of theirs. I hear the door open, and I can see the reflection of Rufus bringing in my bowl of oats.
Rufus smiles at me and says, "G'mornin' li'l Kelce! Here's breakfast for you." I don't get it why he calls me little. I mean I am taller than him, or maybe he's just short because Carmen is also taller than him, which reminds me, I've to ask him something that's been bothering me.
"When's Carmen going to come? I haven't seen her for days."
"Don't worry Kelce. She promised she'll be here today."
Rufus stares into space, while I spoon in mouthfuls of oats.
A few minutes later, the door opens again and in walks Carmen, looking as exotic and beautiful as ever. Rufus jumps up and almost runs out to meet her. I guess he'd been missing her as much as I did. But I don't run to meet her. I don't like what he does. It annoys me for some reason . They're now kissing each other furiously. I can see her hands clutching Rufus' dirty blonde hair. It's always been like this with them. When they're alone with only me around they kiss for a long time. However when their other friends are here, they just sort of kiss, more like their lips brush against each other. For the first time, I feel embarrassed watching them kiss. Also, I feel a weird something gnawing at my stomach. I look away and quickly empty my bowl and pick up one of my books to read.
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