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Anyways, on the topic of chapter one. I liked it, but did feel it was underdeveloped. I would kind of like to know more about where the freak lives. It seems like a horrific sort of place and readers always sort of like reading more about those sort of things in a sick sort of way. It sort of connects the reader to whoever is going through this horrific life, and could give a bit more starting insight into the freak. But that's just an idea.
Looking forward to seeing more of this! And to someday seeing it all in print!
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Keep working on this!
-Lauren-
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