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Sat Apr 16, 2011 12:09 pm
TDMitchell says...



SUE THE WORLD
W&M: Timothy David Mitchell



Looking at you; grin on your face,
What you hiding now?
You have a way, you have a plan,
Scheme of grand design.

Something you want, life to go right,
Just explain it how,
Then it all falls to part, loosing your hair,
Now life’s not so fine.

What are you going to do?
What are you going to do?

Gonna sue the world for all of its problems?
There’s gotta be someone to blame!
There’s a question I’ve been longing to ask you
and I think maybe now is the time:
What are you going to do?
What are you going to do?

Head in your hands; honest to God,
has it come to this?
Ready to crack if the world delivers
one more final blow.

I read your mind: you’re crying away.
the target you’ve missed.
“What did I do?” “Why must I sink
this God awful low?”

What are you going to do?
What are you going to do?

Gonna sue the world for all of its problems?
There’s gotta be someone to blame!
There’s a question I’ve been longing to ask you
and I think maybe now is the time:
What are you going to do?
What are you going to do?

You thought you had all of the answers
and you had it all worked out today,
But now that your plans are not working,
Get ready ‘cause someone will pay!

You can spend all this time feeling sorry
and depressed and lose all faith in God.
But I know there’s an end to the tunnel,
and like you told me, just keep hanging on.

What are you going to do?
What are you going to do?

What are you going to do?
What are you going to do?

Gonna sue the world for all of its problems?
There’s gotta be someone to blame!
There’s a question I’ve been longing to ask you
and I think maybe now is the time:

Gonna sue the world for all of its problems?
There’s gotta be someone to blame!
There’s a question I’ve been longing to ask you
and I think maybe now is the time:

What are you going to do?
What are you going to do?
What are you going to do?
What are you going to do?



Copyright © 2011 Timothy David Mitchell.
Spoiler! :
I wrote this song while we were trying to get to our holiday place in Hervy Bay.
This was during the time of the Queensland floods, and our way was blocked trying to get through Gympie. This song was written to my dad who was the driver and getting a bit upset that everything hadn’t worked out the way they were supposed to.
I was writing this in the bar of the car as everything was happening.
The chorus is mean to be a sarcastic rhetorical question to the victims of the Queensland floods - “Things go wrong! What are you gonna do? Sue the world?”
If you would like to hear a preview, just say and I’ll try and make one up.
  





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Sat Apr 16, 2011 12:14 pm
IcyFlame says...



TDMitchell wrote:SUE THE WORLD
W&M: Timothy David Mitchell

Looking at you; grin on your face,
What you hiding now?
You have a way, you have a plan,
Scheme of grand design.

Something you want, life to go right,
Just explain it how, This line doesn't seem to make a lot of sense to me; I would suggest you reorder some of the words, just play around with it until it fits.
Then it all falls to part, loosing your hair,
Now life’s not so fine.

What are you going to do?
What are you going to do?

Gonna sue the world for all of its problems?
There’s gotta be someone to blame!
There’s a question I’ve been longing to ask you
and I think maybe now is the time:
What are you going to do?
What are you going to do?

Head in your hands; honest to God,
has it come to this?
Ready to crack if the world delivers
one more final blow.

I read your mind: you’re crying away.
the target you’ve missed.
“What did I do?” “Why must I sink
this God awful low?”

What are you going to do?
What are you going to do?

Gonna sue the world for all of its problems?
There’s gotta be someone to blame!
There’s a question I’ve been longing to ask youcomma
and I think maybe now is the time:
What are you going to do?
What are you going to do?

You thought you had all of the answerscomma
and you had it all worked out today,
But now that your plans are not working,
Get ready ‘cause someone will pay!

You can spend all this time feeling sorrycomma
and depressed and lose all faith in God.
But I know there’s an end to the tunnel,
and like you told me, just keep hanging on.

What are you going to do?
What are you going to do?

What are you going to do?
What are you going to do?

Gonna sue the world for all of its problems?
There’s gotta be someone to blame!
There’s a question I’ve been longing to ask you comma
and I think maybe now is the time:

Gonna sue the world for all of its problems?
There’s gotta be someone to blame!
There’s a question I’ve been longing to ask you comm
and I think maybe now is the time:

What are you going to do?
What are you going to do?
What are you going to do?
What are you going to do?



Copyright © 2011 Timothy David Mitchell.
Spoiler! :
I wrote this song while we were trying to get to our holiday place in Hervy Bay.
This was during the time of the Queensland floods, and our way was blocked trying to get through Gympie. This song was written to my dad who was the driver and getting a bit upset that everything hadn’t worked out the way they were supposed to.
I was writing this in the bar of the car as everything was happening.
The chorus is mean to be a sarcastic rhetorical question to the victims of the Queensland floods - “Things go wrong! What are you gonna do? Sue the world?”
If you would like to hear a preview, just say and I’ll try and make one up.




I couldn't find many nitpicks for this, gramatical or other so you've done really well. I understand what you're going on about and found it easy to relate to. Good job!
  





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Sun Jul 31, 2011 7:20 am
LiesOnLies says...



I'm glad the other person pointed out all of the errors because I really wasn't in the mood to do that myself..lol. Anyway, I think the song was okay and I really liked this part

You thought you had all of the answers
and you had it all worked out today,
But now that your plans are not working,
Get ready ‘cause someone will pay!
  








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