Young Writers Society

Although I wouldn't say it was perfect, it could do with some grammer checks, I thought it was interesting and even though some people here wouldn't have any idea why you would write something like that, I can relate to you. I love the title too, that caught me right away... But ( I feel a little dumb) how does the title fit in to the writing?

Maybe I need coffee...

OH!! But I love, love, love how at the end it's getting gruesome and so disturbing and then it turns out to be a dream!!! I can only say I've been there and done that...

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Hey we all have those wierd dreams every now and then.

... I've never... Wished I had though.. That would be the best dream ever. Yeah, but it wouldn't be me with the razor and the blood. It would be someone who I hate... Alot.

I laughed my ass off.

Interesting...but were you trying to be serious or not???
Well, the way I look at it, you have to laugh at redneck lesbians.
And girls, stop pulling each others hair out.

Just out of curiousity, what was the meaning behind this title?

No offense... but I think I am going to barf now....
I don't know why but it reminded me of... Shrieks Jesus was Gother Than You

In some odd way... maybe the discription reminded me of Dani in the story... *shrugs*

The vivid descriptions you used made my stomach turn.
Still, though, very good.
I agree with many here in that this would've been more successfull as a poem.

Shriek wrote:Just out of curiousity, what was the meaning behind this title?

I liked how it felt.

ok now im scared, extreamly. That was um, scary and vivid. And yes, well it was er different. No once you get past the sick humour of it all its very well discribed. Images, lots and lots of images! Your a talented writerand i think you've done a good job its just well, maybe not to everybodys liking, i enoyed it though. Well my muderous blood lusting alternate personality did.