Hi there!
Wow, this is a great story! I like your style. I think it's great that you kept the words and sentences simple; they really put a lot of emotion into the piece. You did a great job with the interaction of the two characters. They're bonding over a simple subject, one they can both relate to.
There's nothing that I can say bad about this piece. I enjoyed reading it and it's apparent that you really read through and changed it before you posted it. Good job!
Sorry if you were expecting a more in depth review, but there's really nothing I can critique about this. Keep writing!
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