Ok, I know this is a very fast beginning, but it sorta needs to be like that. Um please read and review.Please try to hang in, I know this is sorta a rough scene.I"m trying to edit on starry's critique. So, hopefully that will make it better. sorry it sucks so much.
In a valley that only the gifted could see was a castle. The castle partially surrounded by a deep lake. A lake that would be the deepest in the world if mortals knew about it. There are four rulers to the valey, their names are Dayton, Daun,Twila and Luna. Each ruler rules at one part of the day, loosing all power after that point in time is over.In the castle two women talked to each other, both of which were one of the four rulers of the valley.
“So we will go in almost at the end of twilight and take them down. Am I correct?” One of the rulers said, her name was Luna. She wearing a black cape with stars that fell and moved as she did. She had pure black hair that could be seen having stars dancing a crossed it.
“Of course we will, Luna. Our plans still have not changed, but may I remind you that I can do nothing but fight after twilight,” The other ruler said, her name was Twila. She too was wearing a cape, but hers had the colors of twilight, changing colors every once in a while. Her hair was purple that changed its shade with every passing minute.
“Good. Now this valley will be ours and we will be able to change anything as we please. We will set the boundaries. We will say when the time changes. We will be the ones that are bowed to. We will rule!” Luna raised her voice on this last sentence, but careful not to alert anyone about anything suspicious. “Twila, I can tell your nervous, but worry not. This valley and everything in it shall be ours.”
“Thank you, Luna,” Twila said, “Now we must be hurrying, twilight will be ending soon.”
Both of the rulers hurried down the hall, quieter and deadlier than any ninja. They both stopped by a door where they heard people talking.Luna looked cautiosly inside. There was a window that had a view of the lake that partially surrounded the castle, a mantle was above a fire place with a sword on it.
“Well, it looks like Twila won’t be ruling anymore. Now it’s Luna’s shift. Doesn’t it feel odd not being able to change the color of the sky, or how a tree looks like?” A male voice said from the other side of the door.
“I know how you feel, Daun,” a different man was saying. Their voices were getting closer, heading towards the door that Luna and Twila were standing by.
“Hey boys,” Twila and Luna said at the same time, blocking the only exit in that room except for the windows.
“Oh hello Luna, Twila,” Daun greeted. Twila and Luna took a step forward, still blocking the exit and glared. A smirk crossed Luna’s face as she thought of their future.
“W-what’s going on?” the first man who had spoken stammered.
“Oh, nothing, Dayton. Not that you haven’t figured out. We’re over-throwing you,” Luna said, and with a grin of satisfaction on her face she kicked him into the back wall, under the mantle piece with the sword. She waved her hand at the sword and it came crashing down.
"Guards!"Dayton yelled as he scrambled out of the way.
"They're not coming," Twila said simply."They're on our side now."
While Luna was battling Dayton, Twila was enjoying her battle with Daun.
“Why are you doing this?” Daun asked.
“I want more power. Don't you ever want to have a little more power? I want people to bow to me, me and Luna. We should be the true rulers. We have more power than you, only the strongest should rule.” Then Twila punched him in the face. Usually the fight would have been done minutes after the fight started, but since Twila had no power it was harder. She couldn’t make things move with the flick of her wrist. She also couldn’t pull her cape around herself and disappear. Instead she was left punching and kicking someone. Twila swung another punch and missed. She was knocked down by Daun, who then pinned her to the ground.
“You don’t have to do this,” Daun said, “We can act like this never happened, if you just give in.”
“You’re too nice,” Twila observed, “Besides, why would I want to be on the good side. It’s always so boring.” Twila struggled to get out from under his pin. Then she bit him on the hand. Daun cried out in pain lifting his hand to his mouth. Twila seized the moment and pushing on his chest and pinned him to the ground. “Did that hurt?” Twila asked, “Well, too bad!” Twila punched him in the face.
Luna was enjoying this all too much. The sound of Dayton’s wheezing as he got to his feet, the blood running from his nose. She loved it. Luna had been knocked down, and there was a gash running across her nose where Dayton’s dagger had cut her. She got up effortlessly; the fact that it was night gave her extra power.
“Dayton, Dayton, Dayton, when will you learn to just give up?” Luna asked. Dayton looked up. He looked tired, he felt tired, and Luna knew it too. Dayton grabbed the sword that had almost killed him earlier in the fight. He walked steadily towards Luna. When Dayton was only a couple feet away from Luna he stopped. Luna looked at the sword, then Dayton, and smiled. The sword was pulled away by invisible hands, slowly the sword rotated itself and soon Dayton had the sword pointing at his neck. “Sit down or be killed. It’s your choice,” Luna said.
Dayton was forced to sit down. Rope slithered itself around him and he was tied up, watching glumly as Daun fought Twila.
“Twila, Please,” Daun said as he dogged yet another punch.
"Save it!” Twila said. Daun threw a punch that hit Twila in the stomach; she bent over breathing hard. She felt something cut her arm. Twila looked at her arm, a stream of red went down it, “You’ve got bad aim,” she whispered.
“I can’t kill you Twila. I just can’t do it; I’m not a cold-blooded killer. All I can do is injure you, and even that’s hard for me,” Daun explained. Twila looked down at the floor; she didn’t have much energy, her legs were screaming for her to just give in. Daun tackled her at that moment; Twila didn’t even try to get up. She just lay there, ignoring the weight of Daun, not even feeling the punch that hit her jaw. Twila felt as if all hope was lost, a fly about to be eaten by a spider. Trapped.
“May I join this fight?” Luna said behind Daun. He was about to get up and fight her, but stopped when he felt something sharp against his back. “Or do you just give in?’
“I don’t think I have a choice,” Daun said. Ropes wound themselves around Daun, knocking the arms out beneath him. He fell, and Twila rolled out from under him before he fell.After he fell, Daun felt blood run freely from his nose.
“Your right,” Twila said, “You don’t.”
Daun and Dayton were on the floor, tied up, starring helplessly at the ceiling. Dayton fought to get himself into sitting position, “What has happened to the woman I loved?” Dayton asked Luna.
“Y-you loved me?” Luna asked sweetly and innocently as if she hadn’t just tied him up.
“Yes, Luna. Of course I love you,” Dayton said.
“Well, then that changes everything,” right as Luna said this Dayton felt the ropes begin to slack and watched as he was unbound. “I'm so, so, so sorry. If I had any idea you loved me I wouldn't have hurt you. It's just, I wanted to rule the valley, I wanted a little more power. I'm afraid I got a little greedy. I'm sorry. Please forgive me." A tear fell down her cheak.
Dayton walked forward, hugging Luna, and was about to give her a kiss when she quickly pulled away and elbowed him hard on the head, making him land on Daun. Dayton and Daun had hit their heads against another and were both out for the count. “Like I’d ever love you,” Luna scowled. She wiped off the tear and looked at the two figures; a grin of delight as ropes bound Dayton once more.
“We did great,” Twila boasted, “The valley will be ours!” Twila walked to the window and looked at the stars above.
“Actually,” Luna said gravely, “You won’t be ruling this valley.” Maybe because of shock or maybe Twila just couldn’t move quickly enough, but Luna had pushed her out the window and into the lake before she realized what had hit her. Luna walked to the window.
“I shall rule,” Luna whispered as she watched a splash from below.
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